Music Video: Our First Draft

Here is the first draft of our music video:

Feedback...

We asked for feedback on our first draft from our media teacher and our peers. As a group, we would reflect on their comments after watching our first draft, and then we would go back to the editing process in order to attempt to improve our piece, with the improvements made based on the feedback that we received. Obtaining feedback is also a good way for us to be able to find out what people like about our video.

Here are some of the comments we received:

"The opening shot is effective in portraying the mood and isolation, but there needs to be some sort of sound paired with the track, whether diegetic or non-diegetic."

"The argument scene is very effective. The order of shots and the way the footage is edited on beat creates a very professional feel to this sequence."

"I think the way the title comes in is very effective, as is the size of the names in comparison to each other. However, I think that the font is a little too curly for the alternative genre of music."

"The final sequence in which the relationship between the protagonist and the other female character is developed is organised in a way that tells the narrative effectively. My suggestion to improve the sequence further is to edit the sequence more closely on the beat. This would be very visually impressive for the audience."

"Some of the shots are a little unstable, so the piece would look more professional if the shakiness could be minimised"

"Some of the shots could be more effective if they were in slow motion"

When considering the feedback we were given, these are the improvement points that we can initially see to make:

• Look for a different font for the titles. We can do this on the video editing app, as we want to keep the size and introduction of the titles the same.
• We will add the diegetic sound of the sea over the opening shot because this will make sure the audience do not lose interest.
• We will revise the sequence of shots that are at the end of our piece. We will keep their order the same, however, we will edit them so the movements of the people within the shots coincide with the beat. We will also edit the sequence so that the shots change on the beat, too.
• We will use the stabilisation tool on iMovie in order to stabilise the footage that appears shaky
• We will experiment with using slow motion to extend certain shots, in order for them to have more impact

What changes will we make based on what we think?

• We will alter the order of the footage before the argument scene, to attempt to make sure the narrative is more clear.
• We will remove the scenery shot, as it does not appear to have any relevance to the narrative and seems pointless.
• We will add the black and white effect to all of the footage prior to the shot of the Hannah deleting the photo of Josh, as a means to demonstrate how Hannah is much happier once she learns to embrace her sexuality.